ANZAC Day Writing
Once upon a time,there was a soldier named Kevin,he saw an enormous amount of poppies on the field.The red beautiful poppies were blooming and he felt the smooth petals of the flowers as he touched those. And he heard the birds humming and squeaking.Next he saw the breathtaking scene of the sun setting down from the sky.
He smelled the fruity scents from the grape tree and then he tasted the grape on the tree. Next he thought that it was so delicious.Suddenly,he heard a loud bang!Then he checked the end of the field.And it was a war between British Empire vs Germany.Then Kevin got into teams with the British empire while the war began,one person got shot and died in Germany, then team of British Empire lost someone and had to carry them,and when Kevin saw it, it was awful.After all, someone in Germany try to shoot him.However he did not get shot ,he saw a burnt fire.Then Kevin threw a grenade to the bad team,Kevin did not miss it and they all got distracted.So it was our turn to attack then we killed all of them.Next we celebrated in the field,After that we all went to the military base to have a rest and the plane transported us home.
Underline words are Adjectives
Red words are Adverbs
Hi Kevin,
ReplyDeleteWow! I can tell that you have put a lot of work into your writing. I like all the descriptive language that you have included, it really does make for an interesting read. You have really taken us on a journey with you. Well done.
Hi Mrs Wright, the journey that was fun is the war part when the brtish empire fought the Germans.
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